Hi Charlotte.I am Isabella from Paparore school and I am A year five.I like the way you described the beach.I think you had to much descriptive words and not enough punctuation. You also could of added more writing. What is the beach called ?
Hi my name is Maya I am a year five.I liked your writing because it was descriptive. You also could of added more elaboration to your writing. What is your favourite activity to do on the beach ?
Hi Charlotte my name is Isabele. I like the way that you described the beach. But next time you should a different colour to your withing because you cant really see the writing. What do you like to do at the beach ?
Hi Charlotte.I am Isabella from Paparore school and I am A year five.I like the way you described the beach.I think you had to much descriptive words and not enough punctuation. You also could of added more writing. What is the beach called ?
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Maya I am a year five.I liked your writing because it was descriptive. You also could of added more elaboration to your writing. What is your favourite activity to do on the beach ?
ReplyDeleteHi Charlotte my name is Isabele. I like the way that you described the beach. But next time you should a different colour to your withing because you cant really see the writing. What do you like to do at the beach ?
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